Matt Bellamy

Sounds like my old IT lessons, ah, so familiar. I think you captured the atmosphere well in just a few lines. Not fantastic, but I do quite like it. And ...

Twelve isn't as young as you think it is. Surely the author knows how young twelve is, since she is twelve herself? Anyway, I think it's cute :P The typos ...

I liked the way the stanzas and lines were structured-I think that worked well. However, I'm pretty sure it's "around", not "round", which annoys me no end ;)

It has a very innocent feel to it, as if Charlie were saying it himself. I agree that the rhythm needs some work, just adding some words, altering some lines ...

I liked the imagery in this poem, you described it well and I really felt like I was there. Forgive me for not being very helpful but I haven't critiqued ...

Loved it, it caught my attention immediately. Everyone else has gone through the grammar issues etc, all I'll say is that I didn't want it to end, so my suggestion ...

It is rather vague, in some places I'm not really sure what you're talking about. Also I didn't like "wanna", might sound better if you change it to "want to"? ...

I found it hard to follow, but I really liked it simply based on your imagery, and I think I have a vague idea of what it's about. I think ...

I see what you're trying to say, but it seems you're having trouble expressing it while making your poem flow. At the moment that majority of it is just a ...

I agree with Whence, the capitals threw me off, and your writing should be able to speak for itself without them - show me you're shouting through description, not capitals. ...

"Stop it." --New line here? Reina let out a small shriek as a pair of cold hands rest on her shoulder. Did both his hands rest on her one shoulder, ...

I think you could put the first four stanzas into one with less repetition and more description and imagery. As a reader I was a little confused as to how ...

Geez, when did critiques become so harsh? A little encouragement wouldn't go amiss, rather than just saying it's bad. Ahem. Anyway. I do agree that the rhyming was forced - ...

For this poem to be great, it should evoke emotions in the reader, make them feel the way you felt. At the moment it doesn't make me feel very much, ...

No, this sounds really nice :) It's sweet, it sounds good in my head, the third line sounded a little forced but apart from that I really liked it. And ...